Well, I did think of one more quick thing to say, and that is, that Taerith’s motives and responses are suiting. I just love that guy. The way he loved Lilia, and is still committed to his promise to her in how he is protecting the child, and Mirian. But it’s more than the promise, I think. It’s Mirian herself.

Well…reading on!

This is a great chapter. I think it really picked up a lot after the very first section. Something about the first one struck me as being choppy. I know I’ve told you that before about previous sections, but I just can’t think of another way to describe it. Perhaps if you just could smooth out some of the abrupt sentences and explanations, it would sound a little better. It’s definitely not bad; just a little choppy.

Other than that, I Loved it! Mirian with a baby is awesome. Very cool. And then Taerith is helping her…well, the pace has picked up a lot. I love it! Good job!

The story’s really picking up pace nicely Rachel…