Don’t ask me- I’m not in control of my brain. ;-)

This was a devastatingly beautiful chapter, Rachel. Really well written. The description was extremely tangible, and I am amazed at every chapter how deeply you’ve caused us to care for these characters.

Now get writing the next one, eh? ;-)

Like Britt, I could find no reasons for your disappointment in this chapter, although I got the impression that you struggled with writing this more than you have at writing other chapters and you are unsure where to go from here. It wasn’t so much that this chapter disappointed you, though, right? Because there is no reason to be dissatisfied– it was a beautiful chapter. I read it twice.

The first scene was… painful. I could feel the stitches. Have you had stitches before? Because that felt very real. Just the way Mirian had internal control over her body, her breathing, the way she faced pain. It fit with her character perfectly. I like that Taerith noticed it and it actually helped increased his admiration to affection (though part of me wonders if his affection is more like gratitude for her courage in protecting Lilia, who Taerith loves.) And even though the others have speculated about Kardas and Mirian after he held her hand through the stitching, it’s clear that he does not hold Mirian’s heart. But Kardas is a mysterious person, and it would not surprise me if he kept myriad feelings and affection hidden from everyone, only to show up when the subject of his affection is in danger. I could see him dying to save Mirian.

I thought you were apt with the way you wrote Lilia’s responses. I love the subtlety, and the words going unspoken but being understood anyway. The restraint. Nicely done.

Borden’s bitterness is complex. His conversation with Annar was fitting and it felt real, but then Borden’s reaction to Lilia’s rescue threw me off. I couldn’t tell if he was glad or if he really did wish she had died. He obviously sees Taerith’s regard for Lilia, but he was wrong in thinking Taerith would be an agent against Annar in regards to the queen. And Taerith was perceptive in answering Borden; he does have enough love, and that’s why he protects Lilia and does not take her for himself. I really liked the way you conveyed that in their conversation.

So hatred is blinding Borden. He’s going the road of Darth Vader. Tosh!

And Mirian…her armor-clad heart is melting for Taerith. I can’t wait to know where you’re going with that.

Keep writing!

<3Libby

*swoony sigh*. I love that Taerith. Unlike Libby, I have no qualms about the fact that he’s my fictional sibling, since Sam and I are two different people. Taerith’s so gentle and strong at the same time, and wise and wonderful. . . okay, so that’s not exactly what you’re looking for in a comment, but I had to say so anyway, hehe.

Now, is my imagination running away with me, or do I see Kardas playing a big role in Mirian’s future? They’d be a nice pair. . .only, I still love Borden best. Guard your heart, Borden! Don’t give way to darkness! Don’t do it. DON’T DO IT!!! Sorry, I’m going a little loopy tonight.

You know something? I like you, Starr. ;)

Anonymous =)

Marsha

I love Mirian more and more. She’s amazing! This was a great chapter, Starr. It had that good “after the battle” sort of feeling. I suspect there is much more to be accomplished, however–between Borden and Annar, Taerith and Lilia, Mirian (and Kardas???). Looking forward to more!