Comments on: Taerith: Chapter Eight http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/ Wed, 25 Jan 2012 17:24:23 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3 By: kappa http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-334 kappa Mon, 09 Apr 2007 20:17:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-334 great rhythm to your writing. the pace never abates and it keeps me engaged. great rhythm to your writing. the pace never abates and it keeps me engaged.

]]> By: Marsha http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-317 Marsha Mon, 26 Feb 2007 04:41:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-317 Once again, vivid and intriguing! Once again, vivid and intriguing!

]]> By: Rachel Rossano http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-316 Rachel Rossano Fri, 23 Feb 2007 02:31:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-316 Bravo! Well written as usual. I loved the description. It was as though the swamp lived and breathed about them. :) I am looking forward to more and finding out what you have planned next. I am excited that you are using my idea. :) Bravo! Well written as usual. I loved the description. It was as though the swamp lived and breathed about them. :) I am looking forward to more and finding out what you have planned next. I am excited that you are using my idea. :)

]]> By: Brittany Simmons http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-315 Brittany Simmons Sat, 17 Feb 2007 18:50:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-315 You are an artist, Starr. Every chapter of yours is like a painting instead of a scene from a movie. It's beautiful.<br/><br/>I'm liking Lilia more now that I've caught a few more glimpses into her heart. She's a dear sweet flower. <br/><br/>And, contrary to popular opinion, I still love Borden. Maybe I'm not supposed to, but I can't help myself. He's so cool! You'll have to change him a lot more to get me to dislike him.<br/><br/>Lovely chapter! You are an artist, Starr. Every chapter of yours is like a painting instead of a scene from a movie. It’s beautiful.

I’m liking Lilia more now that I’ve caught a few more glimpses into her heart. She’s a dear sweet flower.

And, contrary to popular opinion, I still love Borden. Maybe I’m not supposed to, but I can’t help myself. He’s so cool! You’ll have to change him a lot more to get me to dislike him.

Lovely chapter!

]]> By: Anonymous http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-314 Anonymous Fri, 16 Feb 2007 22:03:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-314 I only read a fourth of that and now I have to get off. :-( But the forth I read was wonderful, and I'll be back to read it all (and comment ;-)) the moment I can.<br/><br/>much love,<br/> Britt I only read a fourth of that and now I have to get off. :-( But the forth I read was wonderful, and I’ll be back to read it all (and comment ;-)) the moment I can.

much love,
Britt

]]> By: Gabi http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-313 Gabi Fri, 16 Feb 2007 18:51:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-313 *obligatory comment even though I've already told you what I think*<br/><br/>Hmm, what to say about this chapter... You mean aside from the fact that it was brilliantly crafted, with such vivid description that I felt like I was drinking in the words?<br/><br/>Oh, okay. I can do that. ;-)<br/><br/>I really liked the development with the cult leader. Definitely interested to learn more about Kardas. I was also really glad to see the first vestiges of strength peep out from underneath Lilia's fear.<br/><br/>I also found Borden a strong dislike developing. I don't necessarily think this is a bad thing, it just means his redemption will need to be a bit larger. Which, again, I think is good because of the level of humility he would need to attain regardless.<br/><br/>*End obligatory comment* *obligatory comment even though I’ve already told you what I think*

Hmm, what to say about this chapter… You mean aside from the fact that it was brilliantly crafted, with such vivid description that I felt like I was drinking in the words?

Oh, okay. I can do that. ;-)

I really liked the development with the cult leader. Definitely interested to learn more about Kardas. I was also really glad to see the first vestiges of strength peep out from underneath Lilia’s fear.

I also found Borden a strong dislike developing. I don’t necessarily think this is a bad thing, it just means his redemption will need to be a bit larger. Which, again, I think is good because of the level of humility he would need to attain regardless.

*End obligatory comment*

]]> By: Emily Mae http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-312 Emily Mae Fri, 16 Feb 2007 16:28:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-312 Great chapter, as always - probably my favorite so far...don't I say this every time? Huh. Well, it's true! As for comments about the content, however:<br/><br/>Borden was different in this chapter. Not sure I really like him. I haven't exactly "liked" him from the start, but I hoped he would turn better (especially if...*sigh*...you might by chance have him and Mirian get together at the end, as everyone seems to think will happen....*double sigh*). He seems cruel and conniving here; I know that's part of his character, but it gives a very nasty perception of who he is to the reader - or at least to ME, as the reader.<br/><br/>Lilia had some development here, and it's good. I like that she's a reader, it seems appropriate to me. Her hesitance fit her well, and seemed to be naturally part of her character. Good job.<br/><br/>I cannot wait to read more! YESSSSS!! Oh! And I can't forget - the fight scene between Taerith and the rogue priest was AMAZING! I love the idea of a wacko who thinks Deus told him to assasinate the king's family. Neat new element.<br/><br/>Love ya,<br/>Em Great chapter, as always – probably my favorite so far…don’t I say this every time? Huh. Well, it’s true! As for comments about the content, however:

Borden was different in this chapter. Not sure I really like him. I haven’t exactly “liked” him from the start, but I hoped he would turn better (especially if…*sigh*…you might by chance have him and Mirian get together at the end, as everyone seems to think will happen….*double sigh*). He seems cruel and conniving here; I know that’s part of his character, but it gives a very nasty perception of who he is to the reader – or at least to ME, as the reader.

Lilia had some development here, and it’s good. I like that she’s a reader, it seems appropriate to me. Her hesitance fit her well, and seemed to be naturally part of her character. Good job.

I cannot wait to read more! YESSSSS!! Oh! And I can’t forget – the fight scene between Taerith and the rogue priest was AMAZING! I love the idea of a wacko who thinks Deus told him to assasinate the king’s family. Neat new element.

Love ya,
Em

]]> By: Anonymous http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-311 Anonymous Fri, 16 Feb 2007 13:23:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-311 Oh, poor Lilia. She needs a friend, not someone to control her. She needs someone to bring her out of the shell she has wrapped around herself, to allow her to shine as she truly could. <br/>And now I have 2 gentlemen and 2 ladies, and I have to decide which way I want this to go. Oh, poor Lilia. She needs a friend, not someone to control her. She needs someone to bring her out of the shell she has wrapped around herself, to allow her to shine as she truly could.
And now I have 2 gentlemen and 2 ladies, and I have to decide which way I want this to go.

]]> By: Kirk http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-310 Kirk Fri, 16 Feb 2007 04:14:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-310 Sounds interesting, particularly the nice priest. I am wondering what he has just enough time for.<br/><br/>Kirsten Sounds interesting, particularly the nice priest. I am wondering what he has just enough time for.

Kirsten

]]> By: Libby Russell http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/comment-page-1/#comment-309 Libby Russell Fri, 16 Feb 2007 01:04:00 +0000 http://www.rachelstarrthomson.com/2007/02/268/#comment-309 Well! You were right, it dragged me in (though I should be studying for tomorrow's Judges exam!) <br/><br/>Very well written, as usual. I envy your stability. I know, I know, practice--and you have a lot of it. <br/><br/>The stag scene was brilliant. It was artful and beautiful and as metaphorical as usual. ;-) <br/><br/>Lilia keeps growing on me more and more, and Borden....*sigh* you are turning him against me! I didn't like him as much in this chapter. He seemed less confident, more insecure (which is due to this Hosten guy, I know.) Maybe I just didn't notice before the way he treats Lilia; like she is not a person. Or maybe I did notice that, but I just attributed it to a hard shell covering a bitter man with deep feelings who would do the right thing when it came to it (like my beloved Sydney Carton.) Well, I hold out hope for him. If nothing else, he'll develop more depth, right?<br/><br/>I thought the description of Lila's encounter with Borden was fitting. I could see her cower and flinch at his words. Well done.<br/><br/>The Narrow Path. Intriguing. I'm looking forward to where you take that. It adds a nice tension and further depth. <br/><br/>Yayness! Excited for more!<br/><br/><3Libby<br/><br/>P.S. This is a long comment. (FYI) Well! You were right, it dragged me in (though I should be studying for tomorrow’s Judges exam!)

Very well written, as usual. I envy your stability. I know, I know, practice–and you have a lot of it.

The stag scene was brilliant. It was artful and beautiful and as metaphorical as usual. ;-)

Lilia keeps growing on me more and more, and Borden….*sigh* you are turning him against me! I didn’t like him as much in this chapter. He seemed less confident, more insecure (which is due to this Hosten guy, I know.) Maybe I just didn’t notice before the way he treats Lilia; like she is not a person. Or maybe I did notice that, but I just attributed it to a hard shell covering a bitter man with deep feelings who would do the right thing when it came to it (like my beloved Sydney Carton.) Well, I hold out hope for him. If nothing else, he’ll develop more depth, right?

I thought the description of Lila’s encounter with Borden was fitting. I could see her cower and flinch at his words. Well done.

The Narrow Path. Intriguing. I’m looking forward to where you take that. It adds a nice tension and further depth.

Yayness! Excited for more!

<3Libby

P.S. This is a long comment. (FYI)

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